I stumbled upon Lillie McFerrin’s Five Sentence Fiction site and decided to join in on the fun. Per Lillie’s blog, “Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.”
This week’s word is Tattered. Go ahead and give it a try. Here’s my take:
She no longer lets me see her face. At first, it was the way she combed her hair, but after awhile I noticed light bulbs missing from lamps and ceiling fans. One night, she returned from the drugstore with gauze and wrapped her entire head in tatters of white cloth. Now she’s become a mummy, shuffling through dark hallways and rooms, moaning and mourning for our dead child. I drained the swimming pool months ago, but she still won’t go near it.
Copyright © 2012 Angel Zapata
I absolutely LOVE this. Such emotion! I can feel her pain.ReplyDelete
My heart clutches—beautiful and dark. I especially like that the 1st person narrator conveys the woman's feelings so strongly (& their relationship).ReplyDelete
This sings with anguish. Terrific addition to the FSF family!ReplyDelete
Smack! That one definitely packs a punch. Always dark beauty in your writing.ReplyDelete
Okay, twist my arm...
Hey, I really appreciate you all coming by and reading this tiny heartbreaker. Please do stop by Lillie McFerrin's blog. Click the links to read what other writers have created with the same prompt word.ReplyDelete
Great pack to this one. Love the ending especially, gives it a whole 'nother pathos. Peace...ReplyDelete
Angel, can feel the woman's pain so strongly in your story.ReplyDelete
Glad you've joined in on 5 sentence fiction. I've been fascinated by the 5X5 fiction on your other site too.
I kind of loved her transformation into a mummy. Onward to healing, Angel!ReplyDelete
Wow. Just wow! Very strong! I'm glad to have met you and I look forward to reading more of your work.ReplyDelete